4.a.+Wiki+Application+Discussion+(week+6)

As a group, use the wiki to rewrite the sample resume below. Be sure to conform to good resume practice.

Please follow these instructions.


 * Section 1 - Oaks


 * Section 2 - Hayes


 * Section 1 - Hayes

Hey all, seeing as there has been a little trouble getting here, I took the liberty to make a few changes. My deletions are red with strikethrough and my additions are in blue, and my comments in **bolded blue**.


 * RESUME**

Sylvia Manchester - **Pull the name out a bit, make it obvious** 765 Belle Fleur Blvd. New Orleans, LA 70113 (504) 312-9504 smanchester@rcnmail.com

PERSONAL: Single, excellent health, 5’8”, 116 lbs.; hoggies include cooking, dancing, and reading.
 * I don't believe there is a place for this in a Resumé, I suggest we delete it. **


 * JOB OBJECTIVE**: To obtain a responsible position in marketing or sales with a good company . contribute to corporate growth through the use of my professional skills.
 * Really, as the text says this section is kinda nebulous, but it should not be "Me" focused, it should be more about "What I can do for you". I say scrap it, but .... I bolded the section header as well **

EDUCATION: BA degree in biology. University of Louisiana, 1998. Graduated with a 3.0 average. Member of the varsity cheerleading squad. President of Panhellenic League. Homecoming queen.** (Not sure what to do with this section) **


 * WORK EXPERIENCE : **

Responsible for calling on customers and explaining the features of Fisher’s line of laboratory instruments. Also responsible for writing sales letters, attending trade shows, and preparing weekly sales reports. **I changed the organization into a list of duties with parallel verbs to increase reader scanability**.
 * Fisher Scientific Instruments**, 2004 to present now, field sales representative.** (bolded the company name, moved the description to lower level) **
 * Presented products and features to clients
 * Authored sales letters
 * Attended trade shows
 * Prepared weekly sales reports

Was responsible for handling incoming phone calls from customers who had questions about delivery, quality, or operation of Fisher’s line of laboratory instruments. Also handled miscellaneous correspondence with customers.
 * Fisher Scientific Instruments**, 2001-2003, customer service representative.** (bolded the company name, moved the description to lower level) **
 * Corresponded with customers about product delivery, quality, and operation
 * I changed the organization into a list of duties with parallel verbs to increase reader scanability. **

In addition to handling typical secretarial chores for the vice president of marketing, I was in charge of compiling the monthly sales reports, using figures provided by members of the field sales force. I also was given responsibility for doing various market research activities.
 * Medical Electronics**, Inc., 1998-2001, administrative assistant to the vice president of marketing. (bolded the company name, moved the description to lower level)
 * Performed "Secretarial chores" **(Would actually break this into the individual tasks performed)** for Vice President of Marketing
 * Compiled monthly sales reports
 * Performed marketing research **(Again, break into actual tasks)**
 * I changed the organization into a list of duties with parallel verbs to increase reader scanability. **

During the summers of my college years, I led tours of New Orleans for tourists visiting the city. My duties included greeting conventioneers and their spouses at hotels, explaining the history and features of the city during an all-day sightseeing tour, and answering questions about New Orleans and its attractions. During my fourth summer with the bureau, I was asked to help train the new tour guides. I prepared a handbook that provided interesting facts about the various tourist attractions, as well as answers to the most commonly asked tourist questions. The Bureau was so impressed with the handbook they had it printed up so that it could be given as a gift to visitors.
 * New Orleans Convention and Visitors Bureau**, 1995-1998, summers, tour guide.** (bolded the company name, moved the description to lower level) **
 * Greeted guests at hotel locations
 * Guided tours through historic city locations
 * Explained historical facts and features
 * Trained junior guides
 * Created tour guide handbook that was adopted to be distributed by City to visitors
 * I changed the organization into a list of duties with parallel verbs to increase reader scanability. **

While I was a student in college, I worked 15 hours a week in the admissions office. My duties included filing, processing applications, and handling correspondence with high school students and administrators.
 * University of Louisiana**, 1995-1998, part-time clerk in admissions office.** (bolded the company name, moved the description to lower level) **
 * Processed applications
 * Filed office documents
 * Handled correspondence with students and administrators
 * I changed the organization into a list of duties with parallel verbs to increase reader scanability. **